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Not Worth A Bit - A tale of Octavia.

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Post  MC Dirty Thu Dec 08, 2011 4:26 pm

Dsarker, I really didn't think you could write a sadfic. But this actually made me cry. Great job, man!
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Post  Flying Dice Thu Dec 08, 2011 6:00 pm

To be fair, that isn't exactly a sadfic-it isn't happy by any means, but it was uplifting and heartwarming rather than depressing. That, and you didn't treat Blueblood as if his entire personality oriented around being a massive ass. If that and the earlier happy parts are long enough together, I'd suggest cleaning up any minor continuity errors and submitting it to EqD as a one-off, because it was very good.
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Post  Dsarker Thu Dec 08, 2011 9:33 pm

I believe it is just long enough with that last bit.
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Post  Dsarker Thu Dec 08, 2011 10:26 pm

Here's the latest full version. I think I'll have to change the tenses in the first part from present to past, but maybe it still works with that.

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Post  Sean Mirrsen Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:47 pm

I'd like to congratulate Dsarker on having his story posted on Equestria Daily. Job well done!
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Post  Debesh Wed Jan 04, 2012 7:54 pm

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Grats, Dsarker!
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Post  Dsarker Sat Jan 07, 2012 10:57 am

Heh, thanks.
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Post  Corai Thu Aug 09, 2012 5:04 am

These ponies, they can work my heartstrings so easily. Great story and great writing.
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Post  Dsarker Sat Aug 11, 2012 3:59 pm

Thank you for the good review. Was there anything you didn't like in the story that you think could use changing?
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Post  Corai Sun Aug 12, 2012 2:01 am

Dsarker wrote:Thank you for the good review. Was there anything you didn't like in the story that you think could use changing?

I can't really see anything I would like changed.

Aside from a "Warning: Your heart will cry" warning.
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